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Read the paragraph from a personal narrative. 1 It may have seemed like an ordinary day to everyone else, but to me, it couldn't have been further from it. 2 Today was my first day working as a waitress at Pete's Pizza Haven, and I could not have been more excited. 3 In fact, I was so excited that I rushed to get ready much faster than I typically do. 4 "I'm ready to go!" I shouted, bouncing down the stairs and flying into the kitchen, where my mom was making breakfast. 5 "I have so much to learn and don't want to be late," I declared for emphasis. 6 My mom just grinned and placed a steaming plate of eggs before me. Which best revises sentence 3 to make it more precise? A) I had so many grand plans in my head for the money I would soon be making, and I hurried to get ready as quickly as I could. B) With visions of trendy clothes and piles of spending money dancing pirouettes in my brain, I took a shower and got dressed in record time. C) As I rushed to shower and be ready on time, I thought about all the different things I could do with the money I would soon be making. D) Because I was so nervous, I could not stop thinking about my new job even as I rushed to shower and get ready faster than I ever had.

Carlton Burgess

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Heather Maxwell on February 13, 2018

D) Because I was so nervous, I couldn't stop thinking about my new job, even as I ran to the shower and get ready faster than I have ever had.Option D is the best option, because it makes ideas precise by showing why she is running. This fix also is in keeping with the original purpose of the phrase to show his nervous energy and the desire by stating that it was ready faster than I ever had been before. Option a and C does not prove that it was the best I had ever gotten ready. Option B is also not correct because it adds more elements such as fashion clothing and lots of money to spend.

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